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Thursday, 3 December 2015

Revising Writing

On Saturday I was at my Papa's, Aunt’s, and Uncle’s”, house getting ready for Halloween. When I saw my papa dressed  up in a spooky zombie. I was dressed  as a purple bat. I was ready for Halloween. Me and my Papa were going around the houses asking for lollies.

We went to a house that was very black and very spooky my Papa got scared I told him don’t worry It's just a house full of Halloween decorations. There  Were  spiderwebs and bats and witch decorations I knocked on the door and out came a man dressed as a ghost and a lady gave us sweets yummy happy treats.
I said to them  thank you. I went down to another house that wasn't spooky as it was
It only had spiders and a black witch’s  broom. I knocked on the door and out came a lady dressed up as a black witch she gave us chocolates and candies.

When we stopped at Kings Road we saw my friend Zara and her Dad Babu they were going trick or treating for yummy treats me and my Papa were walking to Zara. We asked if we could come with you to get yummy treats they said yes. When we stopped down at the cafe we had a hot chocolate and a strawberry cupcake. 

Than we went back down to coral cress  to go to other houses for trick treating
When we saw another house that was even scarier I said happy trick or treat and out came a man dressed up as a spider he  gave us lollies  and chocolate it was fun when we went Halloween. Than it was time to go home and I said bye to my friend Zara and went home to eat all the goodies .

This is my writing I did with my buddy Vahoi.We done this yesterday and today.We had to fix the mistakes that the person made and make the writing make sence.

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